1) The central character is passive and does not move the action of the story forward
2) There is no real central character identified that conveys the story to the audience (don't know who the story is about) - only exception to this rule is ensemble cast
3) The world of the story is not set up quickly enough (what type of environment the story takes place in and what the genre of the story is)
4) The narrative question (what the story is about) is not defined until too late in the script
5) There is no discernible myth to the story - stories seem small to an audience when no significant force presses the protagonist into the action of the story - there is no force of antagonism that provides truly worthy obstacles to the protagonist to keep the stakes of the story interesting
6) The protagonist does not feel big emotions - small problems abound that are not central to sustaining the suspense of the impending actions in the story that will deeply affect hero
7) First narrative event (revealing information central to characters or story) happens late in each scene
8) Characters speak the subtext, do not portray the subtext, betray the subtext - also do use visuals as texture to show subtext to divert audience from just hearing subtext
9) Narrative exposition is used to define characters instead of the actions and attitudes of those characters
10) Scenes happen without a causal relationship to other events contained in the story